The whistle blew; I was froze on the spot. My body wouldn’t move because of all the adrenaline pumping around my body. All around me I could see chaos erupting, as innocent people got shot down. Suddenly out of nowhere, there was a tremendous explosion. Large chunks of shrapnel came flying at me from every direction possible. I collapsed to the floor in agony. It was all to fast for me to take in. Remembering the reason I was here, I sucked up all the pain, got up and prayed with home in my heart for my family back home.
Very detailed and emotive!!!
Thank you Jazmin for taking part in the challenge this week. You have created a very vivid picture of how a soldier might have felt during a battle – well done.
Look at your first sentence again and your use of ‘froze’.
Mr Ball Team 100WC
Great Jazz!!!